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My soul is a barren plain
Over run with the phantoms
Of long suppressed regrets
Broken promises and heartbreaks
It is a place where you hear ghostly cries
Where black shadows flow up walls
And overtake the edges of hopeless dreams
Its core is dead and maggots have begun devour its insides
All love and life is gone
They will leave behind an empty rotting shell
Hallowed and forgotten
Just like the faith that it once held whole in a warm embrace
Nothing will be left but the vast darkness that surrounds it
Echoing in the abbess will forever be the victims of such a cold world
The nothingness that makes up this place, where not even God’s eyes can reach
Is mixed in with the emotionless words its hosts speaks
They cut down every attempt to breathe life once more into my soul
Not wanting to be held or comforted the host must suffer alone
Cradling my dead and decaying soul
Held in limp lifeless hands I stare at it
So long since it’s been touched by life
To long since it has felt love
Its flesh falls and slips between my bone like fingers
Then my soul is gone
Dead to the world and myself
What a miserable soul I carried
©2009 ~Isika
:iconisika:

Author's Comments

I wrote this for my friend’s college class. She is taking a creative writing class in college and I wanted to take it with her. Just for the experience and to get better. She is just going to tell me the assignments and I will do them with her. The exercise was to write a poem starting with the words “My soul is.” So I did. This is not about my soul, the words just kind of came out. It’s different from what I usually write, but I like it. Tell me what you guys think! Ok?

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:iconrogueshepherd:
very descriptive, i like the doom and gloom mood of it, i would not go into physical description of how maggots feast on a corpse, but over all its a decent poem

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Animals please keep your humans on a leash.... :shakefist:


"One Radical Poet With a Social Collar"
:iconisika:
Thank you for reading it! Glad you liked it.

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"Did you dream?"
No

"Tell me a dream?"
I rarely dream

"You're broke."

Quote from an awesome comic by Fehed Said & Shari Chankhamma called 'The Clarence Principle'! Vist their website link
:iconrogueshepherd:
i do admit im not used to reading these poems so this was a pleasant supprise

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Animals please keep your humans on a leash.... :shakefist:


"One Radical Poet With a Social Collar"
:iconisika:
When you say, these poems, what do you mean by that? I am happy you liked it.

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"Did you dream?"
No

"Tell me a dream?"
I rarely dream

"You're broke."

Quote from an awesome comic by Fehed Said & Shari Chankhamma called 'The Clarence Principle'! Vist their website link
:iconrogueshepherd:
i meant to say ones with constraints normally people do not choose one that talks about the soul and if they do they certainly do not describe the physical aspects of a soul... for what it could be, all the poems i have wrote like "Orchard" or "Time" (the two i can think of on the top of my head) i chose to go into the ideas behind what a soul is, like they talk about in various religions (take your pick... they all have the same ideas about how you die) but i guess i never looked at what a soul looks like, which is why this made me ponder

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Animals please keep your humans on a leash.... :shakefist:


"One Radical Poet With a Social Collar"
:iconisika:
Yours sound really interesting. I never really thought about what a soul is, like a deeper meaning I guess. And I never really thought of my pome as physical. Will I am happy it made you think. lol Thanks for talking with me, I really enjoy it.

--
"Did you dream?"
No

"Tell me a dream?"
I rarely dream

"You're broke."

Quote from an awesome comic by Fehed Said & Shari Chankhamma called 'The Clarence Principle'! Vist their website link
:iconrogueshepherd:
i think you have a gift of description for what the eyes see... defiantly play to your strong suit

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Animals please keep your humans on a leash.... :shakefist:


"One Radical Poet With a Social Collar"
:iconisika:
Well thank you, I like descripiton. I love being able to picture what I am reading. I just have to be careful not to over do it. ^^

--
"Did you dream?"
No

"Tell me a dream?"
I rarely dream

"You're broke."

Quote from an awesome comic by Fehed Said & Shari Chankhamma called 'The Clarence Principle'! Vist their website link
:iconrogueshepherd:
yeah, thats always the challenge... but i think it was best described by a friend of mine, that once you write a poem it needs no revision (though i admit i do that) ahhh... i would let you be the judge of that, i mean that because we all have that instinct of what is considered over board

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Animals please keep your humans on a leash.... :shakefist:


"One Radical Poet With a Social Collar"

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